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The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment

The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment
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The blueprints contain information regarding changes likely to occur at an office building for its future redevelopment.
Overall
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, it is predicted that alterations will happen to increase the number of staff facilities and gates
while
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 rearrangements will be made to most areas of the plan.
Additionally
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, Storeroom is the only
structures
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structure
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 to remain in place. Beginning with the departure area, where there is
likelihood
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the likelihood
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 that the entrance will be relocated to the bottom
center
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centre
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.
Moreover
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, four offices will
also
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 be converted into two larger offices and resituated
in
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on
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 both sides of the entrance. Moving through the grass
in
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to
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 the left of the map, it is expected to make way for
Outdoor
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an Outdoor
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 Seating Area and add more triple
of
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apply
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chairs in there. Moving onto the top of the layout,
the
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apply
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both
of
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apply
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the kitchen and canteen are likely to
repurposed
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to
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into
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 a pair of
office
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offices
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.
In addition
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, the Storeroom will remain in the same place
whereas
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 the CWs will be relocated to the top left corner.
Finally
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, the other grass is predicted to convert into
Meeting
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a Meeting
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 area. There will be
Coffee
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a Coffee
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 Machine to serve employees and a couple of chairs.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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