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Every year more students to study online rather than attend classes on campus What you think the causes of this trends?What are the solution for that

#year #students #study #classes #campus #trends
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Nowadays, the majority of
students
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sooner
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rather
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 study online than study on
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. One of the main
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that is
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 easier accessibility and another one is
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cost
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 of these kinds of
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. To encourage
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 to attend
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 on
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,
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cost
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the cost
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 of online
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, some facilities should be provided for
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 on
campus
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. Nowadays,
Students
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 would rather have free conditions to pursue their academic tasks. Online
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 conditions and pupils can watch different
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 online everywhere and
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, they are not forced to do their homework at a certain time and can make plans freely.
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, plenty of online
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classes
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syllabous
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 as the university
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courses
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 and sometimes they are free. To tackle
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 should increase
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 of the online
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. academic organizations can do that because not only is the accessibility to online
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students
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 and everywhere that they want.
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can not be provided in online
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their
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, many universities in the UK provide laptops for
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 in order to conduct research,
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, universities try to provide some summer
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 and internships in order
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easier
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 and
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pay less money for these
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 they would rather attend online
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instead
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 of
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classes
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. To address
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rising
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cost
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coherence cohesion
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You've addressed the task adequately by discussing both causes and solutions for the trend of online study.

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