Write about the following topic : All children should study a foreign language in school, starting in their earliest grades, To what extent do you agree or disagree with statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Study
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Studying
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a foreign
language
is
improtant
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important
at school
these day
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this day
these days
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.  I think there
is
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are
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many
benefit
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benefits
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of
study
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studying
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in the earliest grades. 
First,
children
in
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at
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small ages
they
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apply
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absorb
the
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apply
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information quickly and easily.
Secondly
, their mind is empty they
available
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are available
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to
memroize
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memorise
a new thing daily. They say the
child
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child's
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mind is like withe
borad
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board
you can load what you
went
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want
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them to teach.
In
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Otherwise
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otherwise
,
their
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there
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is
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are
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disadvantages like some children will forget
his
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their
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native
language
or not
lerning
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learn
it correctly which
very
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is very
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wrong. I
am
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apply
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fuley
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fully
agree but
thir
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there
is
some thing
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something
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that family and
teacher
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teachers
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take
it
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apply
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in
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into
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their
minds
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mind
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.
Its
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It's
It is
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very important to learn a
forgin
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foreign
language
and
its
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it's
it is
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very good but, without
forget
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forgetting
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the native
language
.
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structure
Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction and conclusion to provide a structured start and finish. Currently, the essay feels like it starts abruptly and ends suddenly without wrapping up with a concluding thought.
examples
Try to use relevant examples to support your points. For instance, you could mention studies that show children learn languages faster or give personal anecdotes.
grammar vocabulary
Work on grammatical accuracy and vocabulary. There are multiple instances of incorrect grammar and word choice. Reading more and practicing writing can help improve this.
paragraph management
Break down the paragraphs into more specific points to maintain clear and comprehensive ideas.
stance
The writer presented a clear stance agreeing with the statement.
balanced view
Addressing both advantages and disadvantages provides a balanced view on the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • linguistic skills
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • problem-solving
  • critical thinking
  • multitasking
  • cultural awareness
  • open-minded
  • global understanding
  • linguistic plasticity
  • pronunciation
  • grammar
  • imposing
  • frustration
  • disinterest
  • balanced
  • overemphasis
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • well-rounded education
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