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A museum near your home is looking for people to do unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntery work at the museum. write a letter to the museum director to apply for the volunteer work in your letter explain why ou want to do voluntary work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
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 email finds you well, I am writing
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 letter regarding the voluntary
work
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 at the museum. I
have
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heard about
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 great opportunity two days ago from a friend of mine. I really hope that you are still looking for
a
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apply
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participants. I am a fresh graduate student from
university
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, and I have a huge free time that I can invest
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 something
benefical
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beneficial
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, I am eager to
work
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 at the museum as
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an 'orgnisitional'
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orgnisitional
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organisational
'. I can
work
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 in organising the visitors in
effective
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an effective
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 manner. I am sure that my great skills in
organisition
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organisation
, leadership,
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and mangemengt
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mangemengt
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management
, would be helpful in being very
quilfied
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qualified
 for
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 application.As well, I have
a
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prior experience since
university
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my university
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 days in working as
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an " orgnisitional"
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orgnisitional
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organisational
". I am
avaliable
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available
 to
work
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 from
3p.m
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3 p.m
untill
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until
 10 p.m except
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 weekend days. looking to hear from you, Thank you for considering my
applicition
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application
. NOUF MUT.
Regrds
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Regards
,
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task achievement
Proofread your work to correct spelling mistakes (e.g., 'benefical' should be 'beneficial', 'quilfied' should be 'qualified', etc.).
task achievement
Be clear and specific about the volunteer role you are interested in; 'organisitional' is not a defined term.
coherence cohesion
Improve transitions between paragraphs for better flow and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate paragraphing to separate different ideas clearly.
coherence cohesion
Consider using a more formal conclusion, such as 'Yours sincerely,' or 'Best regards,' followed by your full name.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and professionally appropriate for a job application.
task achievement
The letter contains all the necessary information: why you want to volunteer, your skills, and your availability.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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