The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.

The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.
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The following diagram represents the flow for
university
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entry for high school graduates.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that there were 3 main steps for
university
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applications: completion of forms, sending applications, and getting the results. Noted that there
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both
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for those
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accpected
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accepted
and that
of
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who
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those who
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rejected to follow through.
To begin
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with, high-schoolers will
obtained
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the degree certificates that as an approval of course completion.
Then
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students
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to fill out the
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form
of
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the institutes they
are wish
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to apply for by downloading documents from
the
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their official websites. Once the Admin
received
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all of the required documents, the acceptance will be
announce
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around two weeks. In
this
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respect, the accepted scholars must complete the course enrolment, select the subjects,
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with
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, and
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to study
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the
university
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.
Additionally
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, If additional document is requested, the applicants should
complie
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compile
complete
all the papers and send
to
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Admin within 2 weeks period. Unfortunately, in case your
application
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is rejected,
this
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could mean the
university
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either
cancle
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cancels
the
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due to
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particular reasons
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qualifications or
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an alternative course which you may continue to do the
application
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process as mentioned once again.
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