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People in your area are having problems with their Internet connections. Write a letter to this company which provides the connection. In your letter 1. describe the problems 2. explain how they are affecting people 3. say what the company should do to help You don't need to write any address

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Dear Sir/Madam , I hope you will get my letter in good health . I am writing
this
 letter to you because I just wanted to let you that the public of the area is having problems with their
internet
 connections .
Moreover
 , people in my society are facing so many issues just because of poor connection to the
internet
such
 as children being unable to attend their online classes
as well as
 adults not working from home because of the bad networks
due to
 which they are very frustrated and want to change the
internet
 connection company .
Furthermore
 , I am requesting you that please check what is the problem going on with the connection and
also
 take some steps to solve
this
 issue so we can take benefit of the
internet
 again . I will be waiting for your response . Yours faithfully Jaspreet Kaur
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coherence cohesion
The letter logically describes the issues and suggests a solution. However, more detailed paragraphing could help separate different points more clearly.
task achievement
To achieve a higher score, elaborate slightly more on how each problem specifically impacts the residents' daily lives.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for the context, which strengthens the message.
coherence cohesion
The use of a respectful greeting and closing is well-executed, maintaining proper letter-writing conventions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unreliable
  • intermittent
  • downtime
  • bandwidth
  • inconvenience
  • frustration
  • compensation
  • service outage
  • customer satisfaction
  • technical support
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