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The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words.

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the volume of people in six different
countries
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 living outside their motherland and the total in each group in the year 2011.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of German citizens
come
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 in first place
while
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Poland
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 is in final place.
Moreover
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, people from other
countries
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 except
Poland
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 itself tend to live in Polish and a few individuals settle in
Spain
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.
To begin
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 with, looking at the total volume of residents, Germany occupied a gigantic 1,198,000 followed by Great Britain with an enormous 1,037,000.
Spain
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 was in the third rank and registered well over a massive 860,000;
besides
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, Italy and
Poland
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 accounted for a meagre 196,000 and a minuscule 6,000. What is interesting to note is a significant difference was seen between
Spain
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 and Italy which was approximately 7 times.
On the other hand
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, the total of residents living in other
countries
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 was highest in
Poland
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, at 1,168,000, and half of them were from the UK.
In addition
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, German people tended to choose Italy as their destination,
occupied
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 556,000.
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 but not least,
Spain
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 had individuals from other
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 the least and they were from
Poland
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 around a nominal 170. What is surprising to see is that residents who lived in Italy, which were roughly 863,670, were from Germany more than half.
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