Write a letter to a friend.You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. Apologize for damaging the product Explain what happened Say how are you going to fix the issue

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Dear Mrs.Elsa, Hope you are doing well. I am writing an apology letter regarding the damaged
laptop
which I have borrowed from you. It is widely recognized that there is a significant reason why the
laptop
got damaged. When I went to the street to take my ordered items, I left your
laptop
on the table. At that time, my daughter entered my room and she took the
laptop
on the table.But suddenly she got scared by the car horn on the street and dropped the
laptop
from her hand. When I entered the room, the
laptop
had broken on the floor. There is a considerably profound apology from you as I made you be inconvenient condition which I couldn't control and not related to me. I would like to give my sincere apologies to you and Mr. Smiths, please accept my apology. If you tell me where you got your
laptop
from, I will go there and buy a
laptop
of the same brand. Thank you for considering my request .I am looking forward to replying to you soon. Yours faithfully, Lisa
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task achievement
To enhance task achievement, ensure that you provide a clear and detailed explanation of the incident, focusing on your responsibility and the steps you are taking to resolve the issue. Your explanation was good, but making it more straightforward and centered on your actions will add clarity.
task achievement
Adopt a more suitable writing tone by maintaining a balance between formality and the personal nature of the letter. Addressing your friend as 'Mrs. Elsa' may seem too formal if she is a close friend. Consider using a more familiar greeting if appropriate.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, work on the flow of your letter by connecting ideas more smoothly. While the overall structure is good, transitions between paragraphs can be improved by linking sentences that lead naturally into one another.
coherence cohesion
Try to introduce each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that hints at the paragraph’s main idea, then build on that topic; this will enhance the readability and structure of your letter.
coherence cohesion
In your closing, while 'Yours faithfully' is suitable for business letters or when the receiver's name is unknown, 'Yours sincerely' or a less formal closing could be more appropriate for a letter to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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