armers within a country are often protected by tariffs - that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policies are necessary, and should be implemented wherever possible. To what extent do you agree with this?

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is imposing taxes on imported
farmers
by policies,
although
I disagree with
this
idea.
Firstly
, it is well known that tariffs can lead to higher prices for food products, as consumers have to pay more for imports or choose more expensive local alternatives.
For example
in 2020, the taxes of
farmers
in America were increased and products
gone
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up in price by 12%.
Moreover
, buying groceries
such
as fruits,
vegetables
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and vegetables
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can be difficult for residents. So it can really influence the price negatively.
Secondly
, our
farmers
from
developing
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a developing
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country
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countries
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can
receive
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displace
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by
farmers
from
developed
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a developed
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country
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and it
is
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also
influence badly.
Furthermore
global competition
and
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apply
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can
be started
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trade
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war between cities.
For example
in the 19th century, there was a conflict between Asian countries
due to
the
farmers
.
To sum up
, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that there is no need to increase taxes for
farmers
in the country, as
this
will lead to gigantic consequences
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  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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