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MENU Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples

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In recent times, there has been a significant rise in the number of people rearing
pets
.
While
 some claim that it is hazardous and not healthy to keep them, others argue that keeping
pets
 has potential benefits
on
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for
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 kids.
This
 essay will delve into both perspectives impartially,without
favouringone
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favouring one
 side over the other. On one hand, those who advocate for keeping
pets
 claim that
pets
 offer companionship and friendship to children and a family as a whole, they argue that these domesticated animals can engage in physical activities with the youngsters
such
 as playing a
sport
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and taking walks with them, thereby, combating the desire to always opt for screen-based entertainment which can lead to
adoption
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the adoption
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 of
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle.
Sedentary
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A sedentary
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 lifestyle has been linked to health and
mebtal
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mental
 complication
such
 as obesity, sleep disturbance and lack of social skills.
Moreover
,
pets
 can be trained to
be protect
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 kids against danger.
This
 is an essential skill as it plays an
intrustmental
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instrumental
 role in alleviating stress levels among caregivers in
an an
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the
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 event that they face a dangerous situation.
Conversly
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Conversely
, proponents against rearing
pets
 claim that
pets
 carry diseases and infectious that are contagious,
This
 can pose a health hazard
on
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to
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 minors whose immune
system
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systems
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is
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are
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 developing and cannot combat infection effectively.
Additionally
, some
pets
such
 as dogs and cats can harbour parasites
such
 as ticks which can bite these children leading to allergic reactions or serious illness. To address
this
 issue,it is indispensable that pet owners oblige
to
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routine
vertinary
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veterinary
 visits and immunisation. In conclusion, both arguments are valuable and the debate is complex, i firmly believe that there is
need
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 to strike a balance, it is undeniable that
pets
offers
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 a sense of security and companionship,
however
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however,
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 the drawbacks of disease transmission cannot be undermined. Ultimately, the decision to keep
pets
 solely depends on
individual's
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an individual's
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 preference and circumstances.
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task achievement
The essay discusses both sides of the argument and provides a conclusion. However, to improve task achievement, try to include more relevant and detailed examples to support the points made.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread your essay for minor spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'mentbal' should be 'mental', 'conversly' should be 'conversely').
coherence cohesion
Enhance the clarity of your ideas by ensuring sentences flow smoothly from one to another. For example, unify points within paragraphs and employ more linking words for better cohesion.
introduction conclusion present
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion.
complete response
Attempts to cover both sides of the argument, showcasing an understanding of different perspectives.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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