The maps show the village of Pebbleton 20 years ago and now.

The maps show the village of Pebbleton 20 years ago and now.
Contained in the two demographics is the information pertaining to the alternatives which have occurred in Pebbleton village from two decades ago up until the current day. In general, the village has seen a visible change
to add
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by adding
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different amenities, houses and infrastructure for villagers.
However
,
school
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the school
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, lighthouse, trees and playing field have remained unchanged
while
old
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the old
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fort and film studio have been removed. Beginning with the north side of
peninsula
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the peninsula
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, the line of houses has extended along the coastline.
Additionally
,
old
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the old
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fort has been replaced with
children's
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a children's
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playground
while
film
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the film
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studio has been repurposed
to
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into
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the flats. The
walk
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walking
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path has been stretched to the
South land
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Southland
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, beside the appearance of facilities between the footpath which is parallel. Turning to the eastern half of the peninsula,
school
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schools
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and trees have not been touched. Another worthy point is Old Fort Road and
roundabout
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the roundabout
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running parallel to the coastal road have
been remained
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remained
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with the
light house
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lighthouse
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and playing field
have
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has
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seen no change in two decades.
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