The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.
Contained in the bar charts is information pertaining to the
price
of airline tickets from
Sydney
and
Melbourne
and vice versa over
two
weeks in 2013.
Overall
, the
price
of tickets for the flights between
two
cities wịtnessed a fluctuation before ultimately decreasing to the same figures by the end of the timeframe.
Additionally
, the
price
of tickets from
Sydney
to
Melbourne
experienced the most significant changes during the period. Looking at the cost of an
airplane
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ticket between
Sydney
and
Melbourne
in
further
detail, the
price
on Monday of the first
week
stood at $80 and
subsequently
declined to exactly $40 on
Tuesday
. On the following
two
days, the figure was recorded at approximately $70 before dropping to $50 and remaining steady until the first day of
week
two
. Between
Tuesday
and Thursday of
week
two
, the
price
fluctuated slightly, ranging from nearly $35 to $40. The
price
then
increased sharply to around $80 before decreasing again to $50 on Sunday. Turning to the remaining chart, which indicated the flight from
Melbourne
to
Sydney
, the cost began at $60
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was $20 lower than the reverse flight.
Similarly
, the data
also
decreased on
Tuesday
and remained steady until Thursday at approximately $35.
Subsequently
, the
price
jumped to $80 before experiencing a constant decline to
identical
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an identical
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price
at $35 on
Tuesday
of the second
week
, where it remained unchanged until Thursday.
Finally
, the
price
of an airplane ticket rose
up
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again to $50
at the end
of the period.
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