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The key to solving environmental problems is simple: the present generation is to accept a less comfortable life for the sake of the future generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Environmental damage
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 some adverse impacts on the
sustainbilities
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sustainability
 of
indiviudals'
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individuals'
 lives.
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 receiving a lower standard of living may impose some benefits for
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 trouble, I do not agree
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that it is the main viable measurement. To commence, controlling
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uneco-friendly
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unco-friendly
Unesco-friendly
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 behaviours which are unnecessary
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 a workable method to figure out the
enviroment
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environmental
 pollution. In the first place,
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forbidding some unreasonable consumption can save a lot of energy.
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, some individuals are prone to use the air-conditioner all day to provide a more comfortable atmosphere, even
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 are not at home.
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, reducing the frequency
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air-conditioner
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 may decrease the satisfaction of dwellers slightly, but more beneficial to the whole
environment
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. Meanwhile, some people
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materials
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 without considering long-term effects, which
outght
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ought
 to be controlled in a certain range.
Entreprenures
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Entrepreneurs
 tend to maximise their profit and exploit the whole resources
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 as oil,
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 and gas at once, which results in energy drain in the future.
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 the level of using those
unsustainble
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unsustainable
materials
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 should be under
supervisation
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supervision
, even
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 may lead
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 price
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them
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rise
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up
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.
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, I hold the view that there are more ways to tackle
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 problem than
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 individuals' behaviours.
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techonology
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technology
 concerning
about
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producing renewable
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are
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 able to fight
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environmental damage without affecting the life quality of people. Some
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 like biodegradable plastic
straw
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 we
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 now
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 actually less harmful to the
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, which means tapping into more innovation in producing new
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 is able to handle the troubles.
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it is more significant to protect the
environment
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 by educating people to form a habit of saving energy.
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many citizens do not realize their
over consumption
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overconsumption
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 could be harmful to the
environment
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, and these actions are supposed to be limited. In conclusion, giving up some current rights for
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future generations might be beneficial to the
environment
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, but the creation
in
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materials
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 and education
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 more reasonable.

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coherence
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coherence
Ensure that each of your main points is fully supported with specific examples and details.
task achievement
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coherence
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coherence
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Ensure every part of your argument directly addresses the topic and question posed, with specific and relevant examples.
coherence
Your introduction and conclusion are present and summarize your stance well.
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You have presented a variety of ideas to support your argument.
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Efforts to provide specific examples, such as the use of air-conditioners and biodegradable plastics, enhance your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable living
  • excessive consumption
  • environmental degradation
  • technological advancements
  • innovation
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable farming
  • waste management
  • policy changes
  • global cooperation
  • balanced approach
  • sacrifice
  • awareness
  • sustainability
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