scientist believe that computeras will become more intelligent than human beings. some people find it is positive trend while others think it is a negetive development. discuss both points and give your own opinion.

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society to improve many parts of life. On the one hand, many
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in many aspects, like automation. thanks to the technological
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effects on unemployment. Because
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life in many aspects.
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To improve coherence and cohesion, use a clearer structure: an introduction, body paragraphs each with a clear main idea, and a conclusion. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
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Address the grammar and spelling issues to improve clarity and professionalism. Some examples include 'facilitated' vs. 'faciliated' and 'accurate' vs. 'accurecy'.
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Both perspectives on the topic are discussed, showing an attempt to provide a balanced view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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