The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.
The line graph depicts information on the yearly
income
of three bakery shops in Calgary over 10
years
from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, Mary and Bolo's baking shop earned significantly more towards the end compared to their
income
at the beginning.
Conversely
, Amandine's sales began the year with the highest revenue but later declined. Looking specifically at Amandine Bakery, it started with a business making $89,000 and maintained a revenue range of $80,000-$100,000 in the first four
years
.
However
, its
income
dropped to about $61,000 a year later
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and continued to decrease until 2008 when it
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off at approximately half its initial earnings. Regarding Mari's Bake Shop and Bolo Cakery, they both finished the decade with profits much higher than their
income
in 2000.
For instance
, Mari's
income
was nearly $60,000 in the first five
years
. Notably, in 2006, it began to rise slowly for two
years
, reaching a peak of about $110,000 by 2010.
Similarly
, Bolo started with an
income
of $20,000 in 2000.
This
value fluctuated until 2002 when it increased slightly to just under $40,000. It remained unchanged for the following four
years
,
then
tripled its initial value by the end of the decade.
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