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from 1960 to 200The table below gives information about marriages in Australia from 1960 to 2000

from 1960 to 200The table below gives information about marriages in Australia from 1960 to 2000
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The table demonstrates statistics with regard to
marriages
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 in Australia between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
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,
while
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 the number of religious
marriages
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, after an initial rise, showed a decline over the period, that of civil ones grew markedly during
this
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 time. The average
age
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 at which both men and women got married
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 showed a steady increase, with the
age
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 of the former always being greater than that of the latter. The two types of
marriages
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 exhibited differing patterns of change.
Initially
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, religious
marriages
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 were significantly more popular than civil ones, with 42,000 in comparison to a mere 8,000. After a subsequent rise to a peak of 50,000, the quantity of the former dropped noticeably to 32,000, before rising marginally to finish at 36,000. Civil
marriages
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, meanwhile, witnessed an uninterrupted growth in quantity, demonstrating a fivefold jump over the period to 40,000.
This
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 final figure
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 marked the only decade in which civil
marriages
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 outnumbered those based on religion. As for the
age
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 of marriage, both genders preferred to start a family later as time passed by. In 1960, the average
age
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 at which Australian brides and grooms got married was 21 and 23 respectively.
Thereafter
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, women's marriage
age
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 went up by 2 years each decade until 1980, before it rose by 3 in 1990 and again by 2 years in the
last
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 year, constituting 30. Men's
age
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,
however
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, grew consistently by 2 years per decade finishing at 31. It is
also
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 clear that by the end the
age
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 gap between marriage partners
minimized
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is minimized
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