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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

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 fast-paced world manufacturing plastic products
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 as bottles and plastic bags has become one of the major items that exist in every home, hospital, and company.
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 the possible solutions to
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 problem that can taken by the government and individuals. To commence, cutting-edge research elucidated the accountability of its massive effect on the environmental atmosphere,
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 O2 that humans are inhaling,
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 making it impure air to our lungs. Despite the massive spots in the world, some countries rely on the oceans to deposit plastics which affect the marine living creatures killing the diversity that exists and contaminating the water making it unhealthy for humans.
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, several solutions could be taken on via governments,
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 as disposal forbidding of these products in the water resources and placing determined land for that, stop supplying hospitals with these harmful things,
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 looking for safe ones to restrict cancer cases as beside warning people about its seriousness using social media and newspapers,
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, inform all shop markets and stores that they should stop selling these items to the consumers and apply fees of the violators,
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 closing the whole factories that placed in the country and turn it into one that makes healthy alternatives.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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