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You have not seen a close friend for a very long time. You also still have a few of your friend’s belongings that were left at your house the last time she visited. In your letter include: Why you are writing What you’ve been doing since you last spoke together Apologize for still having the items and ask how you can return them

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Dear Abby, How are you doing? It's been a long time and we haven't met each other. I'm writing to you to remind you that I have some books that you've given to me for some time but I wasn't able to return
after
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them after
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 I finished reading them. After 3 months
of
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after
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 our
last
meet up
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meet-up
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, a lot of changes happened in my life. I moved to a new
house
 in Brampton City which is bigger than my previous
house
. In my new
house
, a big backyard and the
drive-way
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driveway
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 are the most amazing things. We are arranging a
house-warming
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housewarming
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 party on 25th July when the
house
 will be completely renovated. I am inviting you in advance but I will visit you soon to hand
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you a
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a
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an
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 invitation card. The books you've offered me to read are still at my
house
 and I've kept them with great care. But, I am planning to come
at
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to
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 your
house
this
 weekend to return all your belongings. Let me know if it works for you. I am very keen to meet you soon. Take care, Kiran
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task achievement
To achieve a full response, provide a bit more detail on what you've been doing since you last spoke. For instance, you can mention any key events or activities.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear single idea. While the content is well-organized, avoid combining multiple actions in one paragraph to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is suitable for writing to a close friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing statements are very appropriate and natural.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure of the letter is logical and easy to follow.
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