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In the countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people by imported food?What could be done to encourage people to buy local food.

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Introduction
In some nations, an increasing number of
people
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who
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decide to buy imported
food
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 rather than local
food
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 because of
varities
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varieties
 of
food
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 and better costs.
However
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,
thí canbe
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this can be
 tackled by developing local
products
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 about quality and
varity
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variety
.
Body paragraph 1
It í vital to understand that
people
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 start to buy imported
food
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 because of
varities
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varieties
 and exoticism. Actually, if the
market
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 suddenly has
a
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new goods
people
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 will be easily impressed. Nowadays, most
of
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markets
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the markets
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 are very smart, the
owns
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owners
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 always import
form
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from
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 everywhere for
people
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 to buy and increase
thier
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their
 profit. If
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this
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products
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 are old
market
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willl
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will
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the
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for other ones,
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Examples
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, a
market
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import
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imports
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 amount of
strawberry
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strawberries
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 which are not in
this
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 town,
therefore
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,
people
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 will spend
moneys
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money
amounts of money
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 on them. After
along
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a long
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 time,
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market
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the market
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 will import kiwi
instead
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 of
stawberry
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strawberry
 because of unpopulation.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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,
th
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the
 costs
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also
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are also
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 one of
reasons
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the reasons
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to lead
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leading
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 to
this
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 problem. Easily, if foods
ar
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are
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 in
thier
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their
 season they will have a low price because
amount
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the amount
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 of
products
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 which are made by
that
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those
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 foods are the highest at
this
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 time.
This
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 is
also
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 a main reason for markets
buy
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buying
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 them to sell a high
pf
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number of
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products
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 and keep
stable
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the stable
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 profit.
Body paragraph 3
However
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, having a solution to handle
this
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 problem that the local
products
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is
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are
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compusory
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compulsory
 to improve
varity
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variety
.
People
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 are always impressed with things which look new and
delicous
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delicious
.
Therefore
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,
people
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 should try other
material
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materials
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 and new
way
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ways
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 to make
this
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food
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.
Furthermore
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, the quality of them
have
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has
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 to be good to keep
customer
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customers
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.
Conclusion
To conclude
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, it is really that right that most
of
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people
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 buy imported
food
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 to try and have a new experience.
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, it can
be handle
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be handled
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 if
people
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 know how to improve the
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variety
varity
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variety
 and quality

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grammar
Work on improving grammatical accuracy and correcting spelling errors to enhance clarity.
details
Try to provide more specific examples and expand on them to better illustrate your points.
paragraph structure
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that sentences logically follow one another to improve coherence.
content
You have identified relevant reasons why people might choose imported food and have suggested potential solutions.
task response
The essay covers both parts of the prompt, addressing why people buy imported food and what can be done to encourage the purchase of local food.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • novelty
  • diversity
  • perception
  • premium
  • globalization
  • cuisines
  • economic factors
  • subsidies
  • tariffs
  • competitive
  • farm-to-table
  • eco-conscious
  • consumption
  • sustainability
  • local economy
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