Now many people think that we are spending too much money and time on protecting wild animals. The money should be better spent on human population. Do you agree or disagree?
In
this
ultra-modern world, protecting wild animals
at any cost is some people
's goal and some other people
think this
is a big mistake. This
essay will illustrate the opinions of persons who agree with this
argument and people
who don't.
To begin
, these kinds of animals
are widely in danger and if we don't help them, we may simply lose them because they absolutely will hurt or get killed by hunters or by other animals
. In other words
, they are simple creatures and they need our support and protection. In addition
, in spite of the high costs, we must protect wildlife otherwise
we will lose many kinds of animals
and if we lose an animal, we can never see it again. For example
, a 2013 study from Harvard University showed that 60% of lions in Africa are in danger and animal control organizations can help them easily. Thus
, humanity tells us to do so.
On the other hand
, some people
think that although
they are in danger and they may get killed we should not spend too much money
on them because firstly
, poor people
around the world need this
money
more and we can do lots of things with this
money
to improve their life level such
as buying houses for them or feeding them. So, spending too much money
on animals
is not a good idea.
In conclusion, in my opinion, we have to support animals
at any cost. if we take action we can save lots of species. Although
some people
don't think like me.Submitted by alikiadaah on
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Coherence and Cohesion
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