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The diagram give information about changes in a student accommodation

The diagram give information about changes in a student accommodation
#information #changes #student #accommodation
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The maps illustrate a student
accommodation
Use synonyms
 prior to and following
it
Change the pronoun
its
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 redevelopment.
Overall
Linking Words
,the most significant changes at the student
accommodation
Use synonyms
 have been the addition of three rooms,a social area, and a car
parking
Replace the word
park
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while
Linking Words
 no modifications have been made to the remaining facilities. Looking at the student
accommodation
Use synonyms
 in 2010,it had
garden
Add an article
a garden
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 on either side of the
accommodation
Use synonyms
.
According to
Linking Words
 the plan,the
garrden
Correct your spelling
garden
 to the north of
Use synonyms
accommodation
Correct article usage
the accommodation
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 has remained the same
while
Linking Words
 the garden to the south
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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