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The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011.

The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011.
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The given table illustrates how many tertiary
students
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 enrolled in 6 fundamental majors at an Australian university in 2011.
Overall
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, a majority of female
students
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 were in favour of
Humanities
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 and Education,
while
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 those two departments had the lowest proportions of
students
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 whose mother tongues were not
English
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.
Moreover
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, the highest percentages of non-indigenous Australian learners majored in Physics and IT. Regarding the distribution of gender, over 70% of the
students
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 learning
Humanities
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 were women, followed by the figure for Education, with 68%.
Conversely
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, fewer female
students
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 seemed to find technological majors
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 as IT or Engineering appealing, with only 17% and 15% in that order. As for their first communicating language, about half of IT
students
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 (49%) were not native
English
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 speakers, which accounted for the highest figure,
whereas
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 the number of non-indigenous
English
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 enrolling in Science was 4% lower.
By contrast
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, only 12% of
English
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students
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 majored in the
Humanities
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. In terms of international learners, Physics and IT shared the highest proportions of
students
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 born outside of Australia, with 56% each.
However
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, the quantities of
students
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 with diverse nationalities in the Education and
Humanities
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 departments were the lowest, at 23% and 20%, respectively.

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