The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990
The bar charts compare the average
years
of education, learners' participation in science-related career
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careers
as well as
research spending in developing and developed countries
from 1980 to 1990.
According to
the first bar graph, the average years
of schooling in developing countries
was only about 2 while
this
was over 8 years
in industrialised countries
in 1980. After ten years
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average increased both in the developing and industrialised Correct article usage
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countries
reaching just over 3 years
in developing countries
while
over 10 years
in developed countries
.
According to
the second graph, the number of Scientist
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technicians
countries
than the developing countries
. The percentage of Scientist
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technicians
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both in 1980 and 1990 was below 20 while
this
was around 50 on an
average in developed Correct article usage
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countries
.
Finally
, the third graph represents
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countries
was much higher than the spending in developing countries
. In 1980 the spending was around 50 billion US dollar
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dollars
countries
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this
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dollars
countries
. Interestingly, after 10 years
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countries
was doubled while
that amount decreased almost by 50% in developing countries
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