The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990
The bar charts compare the average
years
of education, learners' participation in science-related
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as well as
research spending in developing and developed
countries
from 1980 to 1990.
According to
the first bar graph, the average
years
of schooling in developing
countries
was only about 2
while
this
was over 8
years
in industrialised
countries
in 1980. After ten
years
, the number of
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in school on
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average increased both in the developing and industrialised
countries
reaching just over 3
years
in developing
countries
while
over 10
years
in developed
countries
.
According to
the second graph, the number of
Scientist
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and
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technicians
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was much higher in developed
countries
than the developing
countries
. The percentage of
Scientist
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and
Technician
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technicians
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in developing
countries
both in 1980 and 1990 was below 20
while
this
was around 50 on
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average in developed
countries
.
Finally
, the third graph
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that the amount spent on Research and Development in industrially developed
countries
was much higher than the spending in developing
countries
. In 1980 the spending was around 50 billion US
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in developing
countries
while
this
amount was more than 150 billion US
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in developed
countries
. Interestingly, after 10
years
the spending
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Research & Development in developed
countries
was doubled
while
that amount decreased almost by 50% in developing
countries
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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