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In spite of technological developments in transportation, many people believe that a bicycle is the best way to reach in any destination. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using a bicycle nowadays?

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Nowadays, we face impressive developments in the forms of transportation.
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 many individuals argue that using a bike is the best alternative for travelling in urban and suburban areas because of its advantages, it should be considered that there are some potential disadvantages as well.
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, the diverse positive points of bike riding seem undoubted. Riding a bicycle can help
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 benefit from low-cost exercise in today’s speedy society. The public can improve their physical and mental health simultaneously by using bikes,
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 the positive impacts that it has on the environment, especially the air quality of overcrowded districts in cities by reducing the emissions of exhaust fumes and
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 the decline of noise pollution.
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 vehicle has a low maintenance expense compared to other means of transportation which makes it the most desirable vehicle for every urban commuter.
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 the fact that riding a bicycle can be time and energy-consuming, it is not reasonable for a person to use a bike for long distances or steep slopes areas. It becomes a more problematic restriction for the elderly or
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 who suffer from any kind of disability. In later cases, using public transportation or driving a car may be considered a more viable solution.
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, it should not be forgotten that the availability of suitable and safe parking lots in different areas plays an important role in encouraging or discouraging
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 from applying
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 form of transport on a regular basis. In conclusion,
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 many
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 may prefer to ride a bicycle for their daily travels thanks to its various benefits, the other side of
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 matter as its drawbacks should be taken into consideration.
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task achievement
Your essay provides a complete response to the task by addressing both the advantages and disadvantages of using a bicycle nowadays. To enhance it further, include more specific examples to support your points.
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Your ideas are generally clear, but ensure each paragraph remains focused on a single main idea to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, try to use more linking words and phrases to smoothly connect your ideas and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures to maintain the reader's interest and to more clearly express complex ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear logical structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You have successfully included both advantages and disadvantages, responding comprehensively to the task.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • eco-friendly
  • cardiovascular fitness
  • urban pollution
  • congestion
  • cycling infrastructure
  • weather dependency
  • vulnerable
  • initial purchase
  • ongoing maintenance
  • secure storage
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