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The chart below gives information about species used for animal testing in the U.S. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about species used for animal testing in the U.S. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of six different kinds of creatures used for research in the United States of America.
Overall
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it is clear that
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rabbits
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 are the most intriguing species in animal testing
while
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sheeps
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 are not their main laboratory target.What is interesting to note is that the ratio of the
rabbits
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 was more than the pigs by roughly 4 times.
To begin
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 with, the fraction of
rabbits
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 for the US animal testing occupied more than one-third followed by hamsters which came in second place with nearly a massive 28%.
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, the ratio of dogs was about a nominal 10.2%. What is interesting to note is that the ratio of the
rabbits
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 was more than the dogs by roughly 3 times.
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, the percentage of the two species, comprising pigs and primates, were almost the same which
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 roughly a tiny 9.3% and a meagre 9% respectively;
finally
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,
sheeps
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sheep
 accounted for a minuscule per cent. What is surprising to see is that the gap between the pigs and primates was only 0.3%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rabbits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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