In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single –sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?
Nowadays, people in several countries think that parents have an option to send their
children
to single sex
Add a hyphen
single-sex
schools
or co-educational schools
. However
, some people do not want to register their children
to singe-sex
Correct your spelling
single-sex
schools
to prevent the drawbacks later in life. Personally, I agree that children
should to
know well the Change the verb form
apply
opposite-sex
. It is because naturally there is a different character between a girl and a boy, and for Correct your spelling
opposite sex
that
we need to explore each Add a comma
that,
others
. Change to a singular noun
other
In addition
, it is to prevent a
sexual harassment.
Boys and girls have Remove the article
apply
different
character. Add an article
a different
For instance
, the boy usually is more creative than the girl, and the girl is more tidy than the boy. They can learn from each others
if they meet and play together. Change to a singular noun
other
Therefore
, co-education schools
is
needed to Change the verb form
are
implemented
Change the verb
implement
this
scheme, and it is important for the improvment
of personality which will be a benefit later in life.
Biologically, there are different parts of Correct your spelling
improvement
female
and male body Add an article
the female
as
a human. If boys only get Change preposition
of
along with
boys, it
will develop a curiosity about Correct pronoun usage
they
a
different sex when they grow Remove the article
apply
as
Change preposition
up as
a
Correct article usage
apply
teenager
. Fix the agreement mistake
teenagers
As a result
, it can trigger a
sexual abuse. Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, the
girls will easily Correct article usage
apply
to
fall in love and sometimes it can cause several Fix the infinitive
apply
disadvantage
if Change to a plural noun
disadvantages
tehy
meet Correct your spelling
they
a
wrong person who only using them.
In conclusion, I believe that it is important not to send Correct article usage
the
children
to single-sex schools
to prevent a
sexual harassment Remove the article
apply
in
later in life, and to know well each Change preposition
apply
others
so that we can Change to a singular noun
other
built
a better personality.Change the verb form
build
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language
Make sure to use clear and concise language. For instance, the phrase 'parents have an option to send their children...' can be simplified to 'parents can choose to send their children...'.
task response
Try to elaborate on your points with more specific and diverse examples. This will make your arguments more convincing and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Consider structuring the essay more logically, making sure each paragraph has a single main idea that supports your argument.
language
Watch out for small grammar and vocabulary errors such as 'co-education schools is needed' which should be 'co-educational schools are needed'.
task response
You could also expand on the potential social and academic benefits of co-educational schools and compare them directly with single-sex schools to provide a balanced view.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which helps in understanding your main argument.
task response
You have good points about the character differences and the potential for sexual harassment, which are relevant to the topic.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example