Today, more and more people are waiting until their thirties to get married and have children. Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?

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people are too
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busy and they don'
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enough
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children on time. Despite some drawbacks of
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trend, there are obvious benefits as well. In
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, I will outline the perceived drawbacks and benefits of modern communication means and explain why
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feel
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has more significant advantages. The major negative effect is that in
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their thirties
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pupil are getting old and for that
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their hormone system
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day by day
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their production of
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also
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. Youngsters
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of stamina rather
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the age of
thirties
people.
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, when they get married in
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their thirties
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and decide to
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a baby after that they
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some conceived
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complications
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not good
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parents and
also
their babies. As a
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, they
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happy in their
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life
as a result
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divorce
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. Despite
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,
however
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also
a
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positive
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such
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thiries
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these
people are getting more
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and they have many
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responsibilities
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example, their family duties and
also
their career. To illustrate, we are living
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modern technological society where everyone is busy with their professional and personal
life
and they are only focusing
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their career, because of
this
, they don'
t
think about marriage
life
.
Furthermore
, In recent days, Money is everything, when you have enough money, you don'
t
need to worry about anything that's the mindset they apply in their real
life
.
Moreover
, They have not only responsibilities but
also
duties of their family and friends, without helping them, they can'
t
survive in society, so that's the reason, they are only focusing
to
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their
career
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. To summarize, there are a lot of reasons why folk think that in
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they will settle their personal family and get
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married
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but I personally
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disagree
disagreed
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with
this
notion and believe that there are more effective ways
such
as they get married in 25-28 and they can settle their
life
with their
life
partner and divide their problems and
responsibilties
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responsibilities
, that's the way they can live
happliy
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happily
after ever.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • emotional maturity
  • life experience
  • career development
  • professional achievements
  • job satisfaction
  • health risks
  • quality of parenting
  • societal changes
  • cultural expectations
  • gender roles
  • educational attainment
  • secure environment
  • life experience
  • shifting trends
  • medical advice
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