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The maps illustrate the development which took place in Liverton docks between 1980 and now.

The maps illustrate the development which took place in Liverton docks between 1980 and now.
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The maps illustrate the development which took place in Liverton docks between 1980 and now.
Overall
, a comparison of
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 maps reveals a complete transformation from a largely construction area to a mainly urban area with new facilities. In the year 1980, the town was
much
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 more industrial area with a large number of warehouses and ships, but during the next 44 years, the town saw a number of significant changes. The most noticeable is that the Ship Museum was
cunstructed
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constructed
 in the west of the river, where ships used to be.
Moreover
, there was
newly
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 built bridge and flood barrier between the northern and the southern coasts.
However
, all the warehouses and cranes were located in the south and north of
map
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the map
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was
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 knocked down and converted into a Hotel,
a
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 education center, a sailing club, a kid's playground, apartments and parking facilities.
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,
river
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 walk was built between
Hotel
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the Hotel
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 and
apartments
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the apartments
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