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The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.
#consumption
The line graph illustrates the amounts of 3 spreads which were consumed between 1981 and 2007 and the figures were measured in
grams
.
Overall
,
consumption
Correct article usage
the consumption
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 of butter and margarine
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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most
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the most
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 popular trend in the beginning and they decreased dramatically.
In contrast
, low fat and reduced spreads were
least
Correct article usage
the least
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 popular beginning at the time
period
 but they rose significantly
which
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and
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 were most popular in the end.
To begin
with
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with,
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 butter
consumption
, was just over 140
grams
 in 1981, and it wildly decreased and reached up
around
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to around
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 50 in 2007.
Similarly
, margarin was eaten
nearly
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at nearly
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 90
grams
 in
first
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the first
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 year and fluctuated and fell in the given time
period
, except between 1991 and 1996, it
was remained
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remained
has remained
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exactly
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at exactly
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 100
grams
 in these years. And it fell around 40
grams
 in the final year.
On the other hand
, the
consumption
 of
low fat
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low-fat
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 and reduced spreads saw an upward trend in the five years
period
,
at
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apply
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from about 10
grams
 to 70
grams
 in 2007.
In addition
these
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apply
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,
this
 figure
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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became
most
Correct article usage
the most
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 popular
consumption
in
Change the preposition
at
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 the end of the
period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, consumption, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • increased
  • decreased
  • stable
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • per capita
  • remarkable
  • peaked
  • experienced
  • started
  • remained
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