The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts how
sugar
is manufactured from sugar
cane.
Overall
, It is evident that the sugar
production process contains five main stages including farming, harvesting, crushing, separation, and drying.
Initially
, it takes 12 to 18 months for sugar
cane to grow and become well-qualified and also
appropriate for use. So, when this
crop completely becomes mature, it is harvested either manually which involves workers picking them up with their hands, or mechanically which means collecting canes by machines like tractors, prepared for the next stage. Subsequently
, ready sugar
canes are poured into a device to turn into juice.
Next,
the juice is purified by crossing the limestone filter before being transferred to the evaporator. In the evaporator chamber, cleaned juice is heated and becomes syrup. In the next step, sugar
crystals are separated from syrup when the centrifuge starts to rotate. Finally
, in the last
section, the sweet and wet particles are dried and cooled in a container, ready to use.Submitted by TUTOO on
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