The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
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The bar chart demonstrates the amount of population in
cities
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and rural
areas
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that were affected by
traffic
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, train, aircraft and industry
noise
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pollution
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day and
night
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in 2007.
Overall
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,
although
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traffic
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pollution
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accounted for the major
noise
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in both locations and durations, industry
noise
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was least minimal. In
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, around 60
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people
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were subjected to daytime
traffic
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noise
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in
cities
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compared to approximately 35
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in rural
areas
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. At
night
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, the number of
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population who was affected by
traffic
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sound
pollution
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was almost half its counterpart in
cities
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, which were 24 and 48
million
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people
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respectively.
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, Industrial
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pollution
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was minimal as it was only noticed by less than a
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people
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in
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,
as well as
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inexistant
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inexistent
in rural
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.
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, at daylight, train and aircraft
noise
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pollution
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were
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noticed by about 9 and 8
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people
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in urbanized
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, respectively,
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in countryside
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almost 8 and 3
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people
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complained in the same manner.
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, at
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train
noise
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pollution
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had been a problem for about 7
million
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people
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in towns, in comparison to rural
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which around 6
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people
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attested. Aircraft sound
pollution
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was
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at
night
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for both locations, less than a
million
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people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, areas, traffic, noise, pollution, night, million, people with synonyms.
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