The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
The bar chart demonstrates the amount of population in
cities
and rural
areas
that were affected by
traffic
, train, aircraft and industry
noise
pollution
day and
night
in 2007.
Overall
,
although
traffic
pollution
accounted for the major
noise
in both locations and durations, industry
noise
was least minimal. In
details
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, around 60
million
people
were subjected to daytime
traffic
noise
in
cities
compared to approximately 35
million
in rural
areas
. At
night
, the number of
rural
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population who was affected by
traffic
sound
pollution
was almost half its counterpart in
cities
, which were 24 and 48
million
people
respectively.
On the contrary
, Industrial
noise
pollution
was minimal as it was only noticed by less than a
million
people
in
cities
,
as well as
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inexistent
in rural
areas
.
Furthermore
, at daylight, train and aircraft
noise
pollution
were
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noticed by about 9 and 8
million
people
in urbanized
areas
, respectively,
whereas
in countryside
areas
almost 8 and 3
million
people
complained in the same manner.
Conversely
, at
night
,
while
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train
noise
pollution
had been a problem for about 7
million
people
in towns, in comparison to rural
areas
which around 6
million
people
attested. Aircraft sound
pollution
was
same
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at
night
for both locations, less than a
million
people
.
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