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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS
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The chart shows the
percentage
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 of Canadians using various social networking
sites
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 in 2014 and 2015. Generally, there was a rise in the
percentage
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 of people using one
site
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 as compared to those without
site
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 access,
however
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, the
percentage
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 of society
then
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 declined as the number of accessed
sites
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 rose. In 2014, more than a third of people used only one
site
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, followed by those who utilized two
sites
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 by 23 per
cent
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 and no
sites
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 by 22 per
cent
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. The persons accessing at least 3
sites
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 were only almost one-fifth combined, with more than half the joint
percentage
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 contributed from 3
sites
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.
Nevertheless
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, the number of societies obtaining 3 or more
sites
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 increased in the following year with a joint proportion of 28 per
cent
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. The most significant rise was seen in the users with 3
sites
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 with a 4 per
cent
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 increase.
In contrast
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, the one
site
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 users dropped abruptly to 28% in 2015 and persons with zero accessed
sites
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 slightly decreased by 1 per
cent
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.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, sites, site, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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