Parents can punish their children when they do something wrong, agree or not?

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It's some argued that
parents
should punish
their
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them
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if they're
worng
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wrong
. In my view,
that is
actually wrong.
Parent
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A parent
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should teach and
coummite
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commit
commute
committed
to
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their
children
.
Punish
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should not be the only way to the
children
.
Firsty
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Firstly
First
,
punishment
may cause mental issues.
While
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Children
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children
may not understand why they are wrong because of
misunderstand
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misunderstanding
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. If
parents
only punish
children
because they are wrong,
confilt
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conflict
confit
may happen.
For example
, If a
children
play knife because of fun. His
parentd
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parents
want to stop him and punish him. The
children
must be angry
to
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what
his
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their
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parents
did. To
affort
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afford
effort
this
problem,
parent
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the parent
a parent
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must need to understand why their
children
want to do something wrong. Is important to lead the
children
in
corrertly
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correctly
.
Secondly
,
punishment
damage
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damages
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to
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apply
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children
's
body
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bodies
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. That may cause lower
self-confident
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self-confidence
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.
While
children
get
punish
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punished
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from
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by
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their
parents
, their
body
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bodies
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must be hurt.
Children
maybe
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may
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feel their
body
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bodies
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is
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are
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unaccpectable
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unacceptable
or think he is different
than
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from
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other child
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another child
other children
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. Because of that,
punishment
may
make
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put
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children
get
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in get
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bad mood
in
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for
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a long stage.
This
problem may keep going after they
growth
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grow
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.
Accroding
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According
to the report from China, the
children
got
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getting
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punishment
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punished
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may affect their
friend
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friendship
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relationship
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relationships
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and
getting
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get
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worse in their homework or tests. The data shows most of the child
afrid
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afraid
they may get
punishment
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punished
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by their older
indivials
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individuals
. So
that
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apply
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, it clearly
show
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shows
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that
puishment
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punishment
to
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for
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the
children
is wrong. In conclusion,
parents
should not punish
thier
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their
childrens
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children
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when they are wrong. Because it may cause mental issues and lower self-review.
Punishent
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Punishment
may
also
affect
children
's
relationship
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relationships
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and their
perform
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performance
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in daily life.
On the other hand
,
communtion
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communication
communion
to
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with
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the
children
is the better way
while
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when
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children
do something wrong.
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