World history suggests that violance and conflict were more evident under male leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent do u agree or disagree.

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World
history shows violence and conflict were more obvious under male leadership,
however
, I disagree with
this
text.
Therefore
, in the next column, I will point out and provide a supporting argument for why I think violence and conflict can occur both in
males
and
females
, not even only
males
.
World
history mostly showed that the ruthless
humans
found under
males
,
for example
, in
World
War II
males
used weapons and guns during the war for the military system and to conquer the land.
However
, why do we think only
males
can do
this
, even
females
also
can pick up guns to fight during war for their living and their lives. Another example of why we should not think the female is represented for only peace is
humans
are always
humans
, both men and women have their own thinking. They must survive in the messy
world
if they think someone will harm them or make them lose their benefits.
For example
, in the period of the election of the company president, they have two sides one is a man the other one is a woman. the side that gained less popularity will find every method to win the election against the other side, even if that method is bad,
such
as discrediting the other side.
Therefore
, you think that discrediting people is expressing leadership to society or the company, don't you? As I mentioned above paragraph, I totally disagree that
females
are represented as peace,
however
, men are represented as violence because
humans
always need to survive they do not think about what is good and bad. they only think about their livings and lives, so why do we keep thinking
males
will be represented as ferocious people
whereas
females
will be represented as peaceful people?
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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