Some people say that the extinction of species is the main environmental problem that we are facing in modern times. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is thought by a selection of individuals that in

this

contemporary time, the primary environmental issue that people encounter is the

extinction

of creatures in the world. From my perspective, I strongly agree with

this

matter and my supporting reasons will be outlined in the following paragraphs before reaching my conclusion. At the outset, there are several drawbacks to

this

problem contributing to the environment and one of the most significant is that it leads to other problems. To elaborate

further

, some creatures control other animals' populations and

therefore

the ecosystem becomes out of balance.

Moreover

, there will be an invasion of other

species

from outer areas which will destroy the original environment. An apt illustration, we can see

this

with the

extinction

of the coyote in Australia, after those animals extinct, the number of kangaroos dramatically rocketed up;

consequently

, poachers went to those areas and tried to poach, taking kangaroos parts to sell in the dark market.

Besides

, these hunters cut many trees to build their homes and settled in those areas, making

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number of trees in our world

dropped

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significantly.

Additionally

, another clear downside is studying. To explain in greater detail, researchers cannot find out about the mysteries of some extinct

species

which are sometimes can be useful for mankind.

Furthermore

, doing research on these animals can be the only solution to protect other

species

of them which are

also

on the brink of

extinction

. To specifically demonstrate,

last

month, I read an article about how to remedy an ailment caused by a virus and the article said that there was a serum that could only extracted from one of the Japanese turtles that was already extinct and

hence

there are no ways to cure the disease.

In addition

, the reasons why

this

wildlife disappeared are still unsolved and it could lead to other

species

that

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close to

this

one, becoming extinct. All in all,

it is clear that

the

extinction

of creatures is the main cause of issues in our society. From my point of view, I agree with

this

idea as it can bring a lot of consequences

as well as

negative effects on studying other wildlife that can be useful to the world.

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task achievement

Your essay presents a clear position on the topic and includes relevant examples to support your arguments. However, ensure all examples fully align with the points they illustrate.

coherence cohesion

Work on maintaining a clear structure within paragraphs; each paragraph should ideally focus on a single main idea to enhance coherence.

coherence cohesion

While your introduction and conclusion are effective, try varying sentence structures and vocabulary for better fluency.

introduction

Your introduction effectively sets the stage for your argument, and the conclusion nicely wraps up your points.

task achievement

You have addressed the prompt directly and provided a thorough response, which demonstrates your understanding of the topic.

task achievement

The examples you used are relevant and help to elucidate your points clearly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

371 words

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Some people say that the extinction of species is the main environmental problem that we are facing in modern times. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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