The bar chart shows the average size class in primary schools and lower secondary schools in 6 countries compared to the world average in 2006.

The bar chart shows the average size class in primary schools and lower secondary schools in 6 countries compared to the world average in 2006.
The supplied bar chart indicates how much the average
size
of the
classes
in elementary and high school was in six various countries compared to the all countries in the world in 2006. It can be clearly seen that the highest
size
of
classes
in primary and lower secondary
schools
was in South Korea.
However
,in
Iceland
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the students did not have any massive
classes
in both
elemantary
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elementary
and high
schools
over the period. In South
Korea
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the average
size
of the
classes
in high
schools
was just over 35,just ahead of primary
schools
with roughly 34 in 2006.
Moreover
,in
Japan
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the average
size
of the
classes
in lower secondary was a bit bigger than
primary
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in primary
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schools
with nearly 31 and 27,respectively.
In addition
,the students in Mexico aged 5 to 10 years old had considerably smaller
classes
than the students who were between 13 and 16 years old in 2006.Whilst,the World average
size
for both elementary
schools
and lower secondary
schools
was approximately 25 in 2006.
In contrast
,the amount of
size
of the
classes
in elementary
schools
was as big as
high
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schools
with
nearby
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23 in
UK
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the UK
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in 2006.
Similarly
,in
Denmark
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this
amount was
to
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around
of
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20 for both of the
schools
in 2006.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,in Iceland the
size
of the
classes
in lower secondary
schools
was slightly larger than
primary
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in primary
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schools
with 17 and 15,respectively in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words size, classes, schools with synonyms.
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