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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.
#information #transport #coutry #age #group #location #residence
The given line graph shows the details of public vehicle users who lived in large cities or
surburbs
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suburbs
 in the same country by 2016.
Overall
, it can be seen that both locations had a percentage of
user
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users
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 which was less than when they got older.
Additionally
,
at
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in
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31
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the 31
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-45
aged
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age
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group
 the gap between
2
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the 2
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places was bigger than others.
To begin
 with the figure for 0-15,61-75 and 76 or over age bracket. With the youngest
group
,
a
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the
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 number of
uses
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users
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 who lived in large
city
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cities
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 was 40% ,which was approximately double the figure for the young from
other area
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another area
other areas
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. Regarding
older
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the older
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 age
group
, there are 10% of
citizens
 in outside cities and nearly 20% of
citizens
 in megacities in
61
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the 61
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-75 age bracket.
In addition
 ,
at
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apply
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the oldest
group
 of
citizens
 where had
nealy
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nearly
 10% of far way centre of
city
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the city
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 and 15% of
urban
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the urban
an urban
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 centre. Turning to the remaining three other groups,where the disparities were significantly bigger.In reference to individuals
who
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apply
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aged between 31-45 ,
citiy
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city
outskirt's
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outskirts
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citizens
 had 15% in usage
transports
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transport
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 which was noticeably fewer than about 65% of urban
residences
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residents
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.
Beside
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Besides
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, the
group
 of adult dwellers which had the rate of growing
city
 individuals was over 50% compared with nearly 30% of
surburb
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suburb
populances
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populaces
.The final
group
 is
middle-aged
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the middle-aged
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group
, urban
city
citizens
 had just over 65% which was 4 times as many as the figure for outskirt dwellers with 15%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, city, citizens with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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