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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one coutry, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.
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The given line graph shows the details of public vehicle users who lived in large cities or
surburbs
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suburbs
 in the same country by 2016.
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, it can be seen that both locations had a percentage of
user
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users
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 which was less than when they got older.
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,
at
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31
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the 31
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-45
aged
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group
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 the gap between
2
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the 2
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places was bigger than others.
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 with the figure for 0-15,61-75 and 76 or over age bracket. With the youngest
group
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,
a
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the
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 number of
uses
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users
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 who lived in large
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city
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cities
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 was 40% ,which was approximately double the figure for the young from
other area
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another area
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. Regarding
older
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the older
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 age
group
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, there are 10% of
citizens
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 in outside cities and nearly 20% of
citizens
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 in megacities in
61
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the 61
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-75 age bracket.
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 ,
at
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the oldest
group
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 of
citizens
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 where had
nealy
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nearly
 10% of far way centre of
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city
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the city
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 and 15% of
urban
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the urban
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 centre. Turning to the remaining three other groups,where the disparities were significantly bigger.In reference to individuals
who
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apply
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aged between 31-45 ,
citiy
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city
outskirt's
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outskirts
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citizens
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 had 15% in usage
transports
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transport
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 which was noticeably fewer than about 65% of urban
residences
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residents
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.
Beside
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, the
group
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 of adult dwellers which had the rate of growing
city
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 individuals was over 50% compared with nearly 30% of
surburb
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suburb
populances
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populaces
.The final
group
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 is
middle-aged
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the middle-aged
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group
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, urban
city
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citizens
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 had just over 65% which was 4 times as many as the figure for outskirt dwellers with 15%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, city, citizens with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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