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the table shows the information about medical care in three European countries between 1980 and 2000.

the table shows the information about medical care in three European countries between 1980 and 2000.
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Contained in the given table is information relating to
three
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 nations’ medical care in Europe from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the
number
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 of French physicians and average stays in hospitals in all nations experienced a downward trend,
while
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 other statistics increased.
Additionally
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, Swedish figures remained the highest in
three
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 aspects. Looking at Physicians, it can be seen that Austria and Sweden’s statistics rose whilst
this
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number
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 in
France
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 decreased. For Austria, its figure went up from 0.8 to 1.0 per 1000 people. Regarding Sweden, its data saw a slight fall from 3.6 to 3.0 before rising to 3.8.
In contrast
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,
this
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number
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 in
France
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 experienced a stable decline to 1.3 from 2.4. Turning to the
number
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 of hospital beds, the
three
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 nations all saw an increase. Austria’s figure increased significantly from 1.4 to 3.7
while
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this
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 data in
France
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 rocked up between 0.2 and 1.6. With respect to Sweden, its quantity remained constant in the first decade at 6.4 before reaching 6.9 in 2000. Moving to average stay in hospitals, the amount of time in
three
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 countries fell. Austria’s time dropped noticeably from 18 to 8.
Similarly
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, Sweden
also
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 experienced a slow fall from 23 to 21,
whereas
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 the data in
France
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 decreased stably to 5 from 9.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, number, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Healthcare
  • Healthcare expenditure
  • Life expectancy
  • Medical technology
  • Government spending
  • Population health
  • Access to medical care
  • Healthcare policies
  • Economic climate
  • Inflation rates
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Public health
  • Quality of care
  • Preventive medicine
  • Chronic diseases
  • Healthcare infrastructure
  • Universal health coverage
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