The diagrams below show how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity

The diagrams below show how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity
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The diagram illustrates how electricity is produced by using geothermal energy. The process begins
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when the cold
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is put into a pool, connected with the injection well. The well is 4.5 km long and totally underground.
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, the cold
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is pumped down to the hot rocks area, called the geothermal zone.
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passing through, the cold
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was heated by the rocks
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and
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pumped up by using a production well. The production well has a closed structure with a connector to the area, where the turbine and generator are located.
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of the underground process,
water
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vaporizes and the condensation creates a stream, which, through the connector, pushes the turbine. After that, a generator, powered by a turbine, produces electricity, which eventually comes to the tower.
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, in the geothermal process, both heat and
water
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are used to create electricity, and it takes place both underground and
upper ground
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