The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area in Briatin. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
The
table
and charts shows
information about Change the verb form
show
on
the police income between 2017 and 2018 in one zone in Britain .Change preposition
apply
Howvere
, the Correct your spelling
However
table
is illustrate
how the money came Change the verb form
illustrates
while
the charts Change preposition
in while
provided
how it was distributed.
Verb problem
show
Overall
.the table
compares between
three sources Change preposition
apply
that
namely Correct pronoun usage
apply
national
government , local taxes and Correct article usage
the national
other source
in the years 2017 and 2018 . Change the wording
another source
other sources
Whereas
the pie charts depict three categories in addition
how
the money was spent .
First of all , police budgets in the Change preposition
to how
table
there was
increased numbers of national government from 2017 and 2018 Change the verb form
were
moreover
local taxes in 2017 was
91.2 million pounds Correct subject-verb agreement
were
while
in 2018s
Correct your spelling
2018
was
102.3 million pounds. In the Correct subject-verb agreement
were
last
source
there was Add a comma
source,
a
upward Change the article
an
slowly
.
Change the word
slow
On the other hand
.
The budget of
building and transport was the same Change preposition
for
per
cent from 2017 and 2018 Change preposition
apply
.in
Correct your spelling
On
contrary
the Correct article usage
the contrary
per cent
of technology Correct your spelling
percentage
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
around
double in 2018 . The highest proportion of salaries in the year 2017 Change preposition
by around
it
was Correct pronoun usage
apply
that
three quarters Correct determiner usage
apply
whereas
in 2018 accounts
for 69 %.Wrong verb form
accounted
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