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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area in Briatin. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area in Briatin. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
#information #police #budget #area #briatin #money #show
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table
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shows
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 information about
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the police income between 2017 and 2018 in one zone in Britain .
Howvere
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, the
table
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 how the money came
while
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provided
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 how it was distributed.
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table
 compares
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three sources
that
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namely
national
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 government , local taxes and
other source
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 in the years 2017 and 2018 .
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 the pie charts depict three categories
in addition
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 the money was spent . First of all , police budgets in the
table
 there
was
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 increased numbers of national government from 2017 and 2018
moreover
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 91.2 million pounds
while
 in
2018s
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2018
was
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 102.3 million pounds. In the
last
source
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 upward
slowly
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.
On the other hand
 . The budget
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 building and transport was the same
per
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cent from 2017 and 2018
.in
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contrary
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 the
per cent
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percentage
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 of technology
increase
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around
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 double in 2018 . The highest proportion of salaries in the year 2017
it
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was
that
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three quarters
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 for 69 %.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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