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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate some changes to an airport which will be redeveloped next year.
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it is clear that
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 the main difference between the two diagrams is that there will be more gates from Number Nine to Number Eighteen. There will be
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 three more new features that can be seen in the future. Looking at the plans in more detail, we can see that there will be two more gates for each of the departures and the arrivals. When the passengers walk into the departures, they will discover that Check-in is moved to the site which is a coffee shop, which will be next to the front entrances. There is completely bare in the place of arrivals, after one year, there will be a car hire, an ATM and a store that sells coffee from the arrivals to the passport control customs.As the gates mentioned above, the sky train will be constructed from zones one and eighteen to zones nine and ten, which are walkways now.
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introduction conclusion present
To achieve a higher score, ensure that your introduction and conclusion are more clearly defined and provide a full overview. Summarize the information more comprehensively to cover all aspects of the changes visually represented.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on developing your ideas more clearly. Use more specific details and make your comparisons more explicit to better illustrate the differences between the current and redeveloped airport.
supported main points
Ensure that all main points are supported with appropriate details. For instance, describing the exact locations and new facilities could add more depth to your response.
logical structure
You have a generally clear structure and convey the main differences succinctly.
complete response
The main features and changes of the airport are identified and described.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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