Nowadays, private companies spend more money on scientific research more than governments. Do you think its advantages outweigh disadvantages?
Presently, individual firms prefer to extend their business to increase their profit so that, they spend a lot of money on scientific investigations
instead
of, government
. Correct article usage
the government
While
there are some drawbacks of personal companies getting better, I still believe that these cannot overshadow the benefits.
On the one hand, there are several merits of extending business with academic research. Initially
, when personal industries, support the projects so that, these companies access more occupations positions then
, more people can find jobs in other word
, they have income. Meanwhile, these companies’ turnover rising too much. Change the wording
another word
other words
Secondly
, the private manufactures
surf to improve their goods and way of the supplies, and have been producing less pollution. Correct your spelling
manufacturers
Therefore
, there
have been helping Correct pronoun usage
they
environment
to become Add an article
the environment
more clear
.
Correct word choice
clearer
On the other hand
, the downsides of investigations are varied. If the companies are reduced
pollution, Wrong verb form
reduce
thereafter
they must not pay a lot of tax. As a result
, the governments leave their fun furthermore
, they have to choose other income. In addition
, they do not accept government
law
because they are so massive and they have their own rule and unfortunately, they Fix the agreement mistake
laws
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
on
the Change preposition
apply
countries
Change noun form
country's
law
. To illustrate, in Fix the agreement mistake
laws
Iran
the private refineries are the best Add a comma
Iran,
factory
for Fix the agreement mistake
factories
refine
oil. They have Change the verb form
refining
own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
rule
and don’t accept the Fix the agreement mistake
rules
government
cost for gasoline Change noun form
government's
due to
the fact that they have special prices.
In conclusion, it appears to me that the demerits of company improvments
cannot eclipse the benefits. Notwithstanding, Correct your spelling
improvements
this
happened
will be not good for Verb problem
apply
government
, but it has some advantages for inhabitants.Correct article usage
the government
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