The table below shows the results of a survey of first-year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspects of their course ‘very good’.

The table below shows the results of a survey of first-year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspects of  their course ‘very good’.
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The table illustrates the number of university students who gave positive ratings to 5 different aspects of their courses from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
print
resources
had the highest
percentage
throughout the whole examined period
whereas
students were not satisfied with the range of modules offered. The rate of electric
resources
increased mostly dramatically of all other factors. Starting with the categories with a higher
percentage
of positive feedback, print
resources
remained the highest from 84 to 89 for the ten years.
Secondly
, teaching facilities continued to be another field with which students were fulfilled with 77, followed by teaching quality which accounted for above 63. Turning to the aspects with a lower
percentage
of good ratings, the proportion of the range of modules offered remained the lowest with around 30.
Furthermore
, the rate seemed to drop gradually from 32 in 2000 to 27 in 2010.
Lastly
, electronic
resources
,whose
percentage
was comparatively lower at 45, had a dramatic rise in 2005 and 2010 with 72 and 88 respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words resources, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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