The bar chart shows the participation of children is selected leisure activities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
the bar charts compare the percentages of Australian
boys
and girls
from 5 to 14 years old , who participate in recreation ( bike riding, watching Tv
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boys
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girls
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crafts
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accounted for 80% in electronic and computer games, which is higher than girls
with 60%.Submitted by yasaman.bozorgzad9 on
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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