The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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The bar graph illustrates the percentages of proffered transportation means in a European city, from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
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it is clear that
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over the course of forty years, some modes of transportation lost their popularity,
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others did the complete opposite. Starting from the year 1960, when commuting on foot was by far the most popular, with 35% of people choosing that option. Following closely was transportation via a bus or a bike, gaining 25% and approximately 20% respectively.
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by car was not as popular back
then
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, only reaching 5%. In the year
1980
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1980,
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the situation changed. Almost two times fewer people reported
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on foot,
whereas
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by bus saw a radical increase in popularity, getting 25% of the votes. Car and bike were almost even, both receiving 20% on average. As for the year 2000, cars peaked
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their popularity, gaining 35%. Commuting by bus came second (15%).
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, bike and foot got to their lowest point, with 5% and 10% respectively.
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