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The table below show th number of cars produced im three countries from 2003 to 2009. Sumarize the infomation by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make compairisons where relevant.

The table below show th number of cars produced im three countries from 2003 to 2009. Sumarize the infomation by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make compairisons where relevant.
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The provided table depicts the
number
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 of
cars
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 manufactured in three different countries
Argentina
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,
Australia
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, and
Thailand
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 in the
period
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 of 2003, 2006, and 2009. At a fleeting glance, it is evident that
Argentina
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's car
production
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 increased steadily throughout the
period
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.
Thailand
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 had the highest
number
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 of
cars
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 in 2003, and 2006 as compared to
Australia
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 and
Argentina
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, despite experiencing a slight decline in 2006. Notably,
Thailand
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's car
production
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 remained higher than that of
Australia
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 and
Argentina
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. Taking a closer look at the figure, it is
vivid
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clear
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 that
Thailand
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 had made the maximum
number
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 of
cars
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 as compared to
Australia
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 and
Argentina
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 across the years 2003, 2006, and 2009, with figures of 735,825, 1,162,356, and 999,963 respectively. Meanwhile,
Argentina
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 experienced a significant increase in car
production
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 over the same
period
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, with figures of 235,088, 352,759, and 466,089 in sequence. Turning our attention to the second set of data the
production
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 of
cars
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 in
Australia
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 saw a decline during the
period
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 2003, 2006, and 2009, with the figures of 452,163, 341,268, 245,264 in the order given.
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, except for 2003,
Australia
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 made the lowest
number
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 of
cars
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 in 2006 and 2009 as compared to
Thailand
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 and
Argentina
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cars, argentina, australia, thailand, period, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • car production
  • trends
  • growth
  • decline
  • peak production
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • volume
  • relative position
  • trend analysis
  • manufacturing output
  • industrial performance
  • year-over-year change
  • comparison
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