Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems. Suggest possible solutions and give your own opinion.

Over the
last
few years,
impact
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the impact
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of harmful
gases
on the
environment
has become
one
of the major problems that people should pay attention
.
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While
gases
emitted by
cars
and
gases
emitted by
factories
are claimed to be the main reasons behind
this
issue, there are some effective
solutions
that can be applied. In
this
essay, I will discuss major reasons and effective
solutions
of
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this
problem
. On the
one
hand,
impact
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the impact
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of harmful
gases
on the
environment
. The first driving force behind
this
problem
is
that
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the
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gases
emitted by
cars
.
For instance
, it is known,
there
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that there
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are a lot of
cars
around the world which
running
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on oil and gas fuel. The waste
gases
produced by them cause great damage to the
environment
. Another important reason
of
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this
issue can be
that
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the
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gases
emitted by
factories
.
That is
because it is known, there are many
factories
around the world. They produce a lot of exhaust
gases
.
On the other hand
, despite the fact that
impact
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the impact
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of harmful
gases
on the
environment
is a serious
problem
, there are some reliable
solutions
to it. The first viable solution to
this
problem
is
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apply
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that
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apply
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electric
cars
.
For example
, obviously, electric
cars
do not emit harmful
gases
and they are harmless to the
environment
. Another significant way by which
this
problem
can be tackled is
that
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apply
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one
day without
factories
. The reason for
this
is that on
one
day of every month, the work of
factories
should be stopped. Because the daily amount of
gases
released from them is
also
very large. In conclusion, it can be said that
although
impact
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the impact
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of harmful
gases
on the
environment
is
serious
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a serious
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problem
that is
creating many negative effects, it can be addressed with the
solutions
that have been mentioned above.
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas by ensuring each paragraph is linked smoothly. Use transition phrases between paragraphs to show connections between points.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support main points clearly. Avoid vague statements and back up assertions with data or case studies where possible.
task achievement
Develop each idea more comprehensively. Explain how each suggested solution addresses the problem in detail, and consider potential drawbacks or challenges associated with each solution.
coherence cohesion
Good use of an introductory and concluding paragraph. The essay structure is clear, making it easy to follow the argument.
task achievement
The essay identifies two main causes of environmental pollution and provides two potential solutions, showing a balanced approach to the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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