Hello Uncle, I hope you are doing well as well as Aunty is also good. I read in the newspaper that there was a huge flood in London last week and the place you are staying was not impacted a lot.

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Hello Uncle, I hope you are doing well

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Aunty is

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good. I read in the newspaper that there was a huge flood in London

last

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week and the place you are staying was not impacted a lot. I am writing to inform you that one of my

friend

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is visiting London next week for his higher education.

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introduction conclusion present

The essay needs a clearer introduction and conclusion to frame your message better. Start with a general statement and end with a summary of your main points.

relevant specific examples

Make sure to provide more specific details and examples to support your statements. For example, mention specific reasons or benefits your friend might gain by studying in London.

clear comprehensive ideas

You've made a good start by informing your uncle about your friend's visit. The point is clear and directly communicated.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

61 words

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Hello Uncle, I hope you are doing well as well as Aunty is also good. I read in the newspaper that there was a huge flood in London last week and the place you are staying was not impacted a lot.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views.

Percentage of Population Aged 65 and Over in Three Countries (1900-2000) Year Australia Belgium Costa Rica 1990 5% 8% 3% 1950 7% 10% 4% 2000 15% 18% 12% Write at least 150 words.