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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparasions where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparasions where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the new refurbishment applied on the central library floor, after 20 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
center
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centre
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 contained four main regions including, the bottom left, the bottom
right
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, the upper left, and the upper
right
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. Considering the changes applied to the bottom areas,
it is clear that
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 the inquiry desk on the
right
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 section was replaced by a cafe, and the reading
room
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 on the left section was replaced with a computer
room
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.
On the other hand
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, the
right
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 upper was changed to a lecture
room
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 and the left area was expanded and changed into a huge
room
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 catering for kids with Children's fiction
books
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, storytelling events, and two additional sofas.
Lastly
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, the central section removed all the tables and chairs that were placed in the
center
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 and replaced the Adult fiction
books
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 with all reference
books
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.
Additionally
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, the far
right
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 area turned into a large
room
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 containing adult fiction
books
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, an Information desk, and self-service machines.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words right, room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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