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City centres are very crowded with cars. They often cause a great deal of pollution. Cars should be banned from all centres. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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pollution
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others
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transportation
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countries
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pollution
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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position and argue consistently for or against the topic. Refining your thesis statement for clarity would help in presenting a better task response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organization of ideas is important; make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and follows logically from the one before it. Clear transitions between paragraphs are essential.
Language Use
Try using more complex sentence structures and a broader range of vocabulary appropriately to enhance the quality of your response.
Task Achievement
Your examples were somewhat general. Including more specific and detailed examples can enhance your arguments and make them more convincing.
Task Achievement
It is good that you attempted to address different aspects of the problem, including both private and public transportation's contributions to pollution.
Task Achievement
You provided an alternative solution by referencing Japan, which added some depth to your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • public transport
  • air quality
  • environmental impact
  • commuting
  • pedestrian-friendly
  • sustainable transportation
  • urban planning
  • green initiatives
  • foot traffic
  • economic impact
  • well-being
  • health outcomes
  • electric scooters
  • noise pollution
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