City centres are very crowded with cars. They often cause a great deal of pollution. Cars should be banned from all centres. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?
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transportation
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Make sure to clearly state your position and argue consistently for or against the topic. Refining your thesis statement for clarity would help in presenting a better task response.
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Organization of ideas is important; make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and follows logically from the one before it. Clear transitions between paragraphs are essential.
Language Use
Try using more complex sentence structures and a broader range of vocabulary appropriately to enhance the quality of your response.
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Your examples were somewhat general. Including more specific and detailed examples can enhance your arguments and make them more convincing.
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It is good that you attempted to address different aspects of the problem, including both private and public transportation's contributions to pollution.
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You provided an alternative solution by referencing Japan, which added some depth to your argument.